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 So! I wrote a thing! And it's probably not a very good thing, but I am releasing it to the internet because I am feeling masochistic.

I suppose... I'll put a summary type thing here so you can see what you're getting yourself into before you read this post.

Title: -TBA- (I can't think of one right now :I)
Characters: Gray Fox, Solid Snake, Master Miller.
Rating: G
Word Count: 600
Summary: Fox ponders, Snake sleeps. A suitably fluffy conclusion is reached.
Warnings: None, unless you're allergic to bad writing, meta or fluff.
Notes: This is based on a picture I drew months ago. It didn't have a background. Someone asked me how these two ended up in 'peaceful fully-clothed snugglings,' since fluff is not something that is not typical of them. And I thought and thought for months on this, and finally got to writing this out. I hope it's not too out of character or anything. I did my best!

 


“Hey Miller, how about some heat back here?”

“I’m sorry, Fox. We barely have enough fuel to get us back home as it is.” The Hell Master’s voice crackled over the comms. system.

Fox grunted in reply, huddling further into his leather coat. The air in the cabin was filled with the deep thud of rotor blades; he could feel the vibrations deep in his chest cavity. His breath was frosting in the air.

“How’s the rookie?”

Fox glanced across at the man next to him.

“He’s sleeping. It was a tough mission.”

 A week of bitter cold stakeouts and no sleep. A frantic race against time when the mark didn’t show, a chase ending in a messy kill and the heavy knowledge of a first mission half-failed. Even if he was only on-site support, it must have been hard to swallow.

He was shivering. Didn’t he have a coat at the start-

Oh. He lost it. Left behind when they gave chase like the hounds they were.

Fox’s gaze lingered on the rookie’s face for a little longer than necessary. He was... nostalgic. His face and his movements brought back
memories Fox thought long buried. Huddling around a stuttering campfire, enduring the constant rain, and the Boss, younger, his lone eye not as jaded or as distant as it is now. A growth of stubble dusted the boy’s chin, making the resemblance more striking than ever. It was a wonder no-one in Foxhound had brought it up yet. Especially when his first mission was accompanying the best they had to offer. No false pride, just knowledge.

And yet... despite the similarities in appearance, despite how he moved, and his voice. And oh, the way he checked over a gun, his hands steady and sure as they clicked the slide back and forth, his eyes focussed and sharp as they checked over the feed ramp and the barrel...
And yet - he wasn’t the same as the Boss used to be. He was quieter, colder. It chilled him to think these words but... Less human. Memories, distant and blurred, of a time spent as nothing. If he felt anything at all, it didn’t show. Which was perhaps for the best in a soldier but... It bothered Fox.

He just couldn’t leave it alone – was this how he had been? Is this what the Boss had picked up all those years ago on that godforsaken peninsula?

Fox’s chain of thought was broken by a violent sneeze. A short groan followed, and Snake blearily cracked his eyes open. Fox studied him again. His lips had taken on a bluish tint.

“You’re catching a cold.” It was a statement rather than a question.

Snake’s reply was a cough. Fox sighed, and pulled his arms from the sleeves of his jacket.

“Sir?”

In his shirtsleeves, he shifted closer and threw the length of the coat around Snake’s shoulders.

“We’re in Arctic airspace. We have to keep warm, but Miller can’t waste any fuel on heating the chopper.” He rested his arm on Snake’s shoulder. “So-“

“I understand.” Not a flicker of emotion on his face, none embarrassment or confusion that would be normal in a rookie treated like this by his CO.

“Go back to sleep.”

“Yes, sir.” A nod against his shoulder. The rookie relaxed against him like a cat, shut his eyes, and slept.

“Hmph.” Amused, Fox drew the other body closer for warmth, and rearranged the coat over their shoulders a little.

It was going to be a long flight back to base, and he was tired.
 
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So, I guess there it is. Any constructive criticism or comments at all are welcomed - even if it's just 'OH MY GOD, THAT WAS DREADFUL. NEVER WRITE ANYTHING AGAIN.'
 
I guess I'll put the picture I based this on here, so my notes makes a little more sense.
 


 
 

In the meantime I'll be hiding under my box and pretending I didn't post this.

Comments

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cherrytruck
Jun. 8th, 2011 09:26 am (UTC)
OH MY GOD THAT WAS DREADFUL NEVER WRITE ANYTHING AGAIN

I kid, I THINK YOU'RE BEING WAY TOO HARSH ON YOURSELF. I've never really seen your writing before and when you were all like WAAAH I CANNOT WRITE THIS IS HORRIBLE I have to be honest and say you lowered my expectations far more then you should have!

Anyway, this is REALLY sweet and I think you actually used a good choice of words! HECK, YOU WRITE BETTER THAN ME DAMNIT. I love the way you described Fox's nostalgic thoughts as he's comparing Solid to Big Boss. And I think you really set up the atmosphere quite well, being able to tell us what had happened before and why Snake's become so cold. xD

YOU SHOULD BE PROUD OF THIS AND YOU SHOULD ALSO POST THIS ON SLASH. I'M SURE SNAKE/FOX SHIPPERS WILL LOVE YOU FOR THIS.
trolljima
Jun. 8th, 2011 08:46 pm (UTC)
-NEVER WRITES AGAIN- XD

But thanks ;A; I'm glad you liked it. I still think it's kinda clumsy and could be better but I think I've been looking at it for too long...

I might like it better after I've left it alone for a while XD

So I should post this on MGS Slash huh? ALSDJFA SO SCARY ;A; I'll think about it...
oudeteron
Jun. 8th, 2011 12:03 pm (UTC)
Well, you definitely didn't advertise this as well as it deserved!

First off, that's nice you involved the Hell Master (not just because YAY MCDONNELL KAZ, but because it's a glimpse into the Foxhound structure that gives the fic more background). I really enjoyed the meta too - the differences between BB and Snake and how Fox can actually see himself as Null in how Snake acts (or more like...doesn't act on his own much). Going back to the discussion we had earlier, yeah, I do like to think Snake has some genuine feeling for a few people and Fox is certainly one of them, but it seems this fic takes place before it gets to that point and that's an interesting angle to look at his character from. It's especially striking when Fox does him that (TOTALLY SELFLESS AMIRITE? XD) favour with sharing a coat and Snake just follows it like any other order, no questions asked. Figurative cyborg, yo.

TL;DR: I think you've shown a lot about the characters in this fic, and it definitely doesn't feel like being "hammered over the head" with it. I'd also say the fic is more ambiguous than the drawing (the drawing is just "cute, wonder how this could've happened" while the fic has both the cute moment and the underlying angst/backstory). And this comment is bloody convoluted so I'll stop now. I LIKED THIS LOTS.
trolljima
Jun. 8th, 2011 09:11 pm (UTC)
I couldn't leave Kaz out! But yeah, I felt that it needed to be anchored to canon somehow, since I came up with an entirely fictitious mission for Fox and Snake to go on, and Kaz was the easiest route, since he can fly a helicopter and was a member of Foxhound =B.

And I'm glad you like my meta - that was the bit I was most worried about in this fic, to be honest. X/ And Snake most definitely isn't a completely emotionless robot! I think he's just naturally awkward and a bit of a loner, and doesn't form connections with people easily. I'm glad my thought process and the thing about Snake just following orders, no matter what came through clearly though. I'd like to think it was Fox who taught Snake that he has a will of his own, since it would create a nice pattern in how mentor/student relationships work out in this series. (Does that even make sense I don't even know anymore.)

ANYWAY I'M TL;DR-ING NOW SO I'LL STOP

BUT I'M SO GLAD YOU LIKED IT ;A;
oudeteron
Jun. 9th, 2011 12:21 pm (UTC)
Kaz is such a multi-purpose tool person. /BRB HIDING FROM CHE FOR THIS JOKE

Yeah, you're right, comparing Snake to a robot isn't entirely fair (even if it seems all the clones angst a whole lot about essentially being manufactured). Anyway, YES, I agree that Fox "showed him the ropes" about more things than just fighting. Only too bad it always goes back to it with them...

YOUR TL;DR MAKES PERFECT SENSE TO ME SO HEY
trolljima
Jun. 8th, 2011 09:23 pm (UTC)
AND YES, FOX SHARING HIS COAT IS /UTTERLY/ SELFLESS XD

Nothing to do with the fact that he's really bloody cold at all.
ikipud
Jun. 8th, 2011 03:58 pm (UTC)
Ohmygod troll your writing is not terrible AT ALL. I really liked this. It's great to know the backstory for that picture too. I agree with both che and oude's comments (because I suck too much to come up with my own). BUT ANYWAY. IT WAS GREAT <3
trolljima
Jun. 8th, 2011 09:13 pm (UTC)
;A; ALSJDHFAS THANK YOUUUUU

so glad people didn't hate it X/
athenemiranda
Jun. 8th, 2011 04:57 pm (UTC)
it was me who said 'OMG YAY BUT WHY ARE THEY SNUGGLING' jsyk

and i love this so hard <33333

I love how emotionally restrained it is - Fox's exhaustion and his inadvertent caring come through so clearly. You're a great writer, really clear and (like Oude said) you stand back and let the characters be themselves rather than writing heavy-handedly. tldr RITE MOAR.
trolljima
Jun. 8th, 2011 09:21 pm (UTC)
aaaaaa thank you ;A; I was so worried that people would think that it sucks... X/

The only problem I have with letting characters be themselves is that they run away with the plot and never do what I want. Surprisingly this didn't happen in this fic, but Fox insisted on meta-ing a whole lot =I

I am going to try and write more often XD
missmonkeh
Jun. 8th, 2011 09:54 pm (UTC)
Hello atmosphere! I kind of had chills reading this. It's really lovely and subtle. The comparing Snake to Big Boss part was particularly well done, and so true to his character.

AND THE SNUGGLING. OH LORD, THE SNUGGLING.

Lovely stuff ^^
trolljima
Jun. 8th, 2011 11:02 pm (UTC)
Thank youuuuuu =33 I'm glad you liked it so much.

I CAN NEVER GET ENOUGH SNUGGLING XD
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